Full Manuscripts

Need help revising your story?

I'm currently offering:

EDIT LETTERS: Flat fee of $150 plus $.006/word


I will read your whole manuscript and give you an edit letter outlining your story's strengths, weaknesses, and ideas on how to make it the best possible version of itself. This will give you a good idea of where to get started on your revisions without nit-picking all the small-scale issues, as this doesn't include any in-manuscript comments. Edit letters are typically 3-7 single-spaced pages, and you can see some examples of my past real-life edit letters here. Typical problem spots discussed in edit letters include developmental issues such as plot holes, missing or underdeveloped character goals and motivations, underdeveloped villains, flat character arcs, potential for stronger relationship dynamics between characters, telling vs. showing and other widespread craft issues, and world-building that needs to be strengthened. For a list of the most common developmental issues I come across during my editing, check out this post.


Categories I love to work with: Young Adult, Middle Grade, and Romance (genre romance or category romance). I also work with these genres on a case-by-case basis: women's fiction, adult sci-fi and fantasy, chapter books.


Categories I DO NOT work with: Horror, anything extremely dark or tragic, erotica (different from romance).

FULL MANUSCRIPT CRITIQUES: Flat fee of $150 plus $.010/word


A full-manuscript critique focuses on the big-picture problems in your story and shows you exactly where and how, at the scene level, those problems are being created. This critique is me at my teacheriest: I'll not only highlight your story's issues, but will also explain why they're issues, how they affect other elements of your story, how you can fix them, and how you can avoid making them in the first place the next time around. This critique includes:


An edit letter. You'll get an edit letter (usually around 3-7ish single-spaced pages long, depending) that includes insight to things like whether your subplots distract from your main storyline, if your character development is lacking, and where your world-building could use bolstering.

In-manuscript notes. As I read, I'll leave notes via Word's Comment feature (most manuscripts get anywhere between 50-200 comments total). I use this feature to bring up a few smaller-scale issues as I spot them (like a character's missing motivations) and to give examples of writing craft problems (like telling vs. showing). I will also tell you where I was on the edge of my seat, where I laughed, and where I started getting bored.


Note: Pricing applies to full manuscripts and partials of 50+ pages--see my "small critiques" section for pricing on smaller partials. I do offer free 3-page sample critiques to anyone considering a critique for their full manuscript, if you'd like to get a sense of my editing style before booking. The same categories that I will/won't work with applies as for edit letters (see above).


You can see a sample edit letter here!

LINE EDITS: $.016/word


If you're finished with big-picture revisions and now want to make sure that your manuscript is solid on a sentence-by-sentence level, this option is for you! Line editing focuses on the little things that can jolt a reader out of the story: scene intros/outros, repetitive words or sentence structures, clunky dialogue, unclear character motivations, incomplete sentences, clunky metaphors, etc. With this service, I use Word's Track Changes feature (so you can choose to accept or decline all changes individually) to fix the non-subjective stuff and I leave comments throughout the manuscript for the more subjective things or when there's more than one way to fix a problem.


I will also try to note any big-picture issues I spot in your story, but keep in mind line-editing requires me to be ultra-focused on the nitty-gritty stuff and that means it's possible I could miss any overall problems. If you need help with those I suggest getting the Full Manuscript Critique or an Edit Letter first. (Bonus: If you book both a big-picture critique and line-editing at the same time, you get a 10% discount on both!) If you'd like to get a sense of my editing style,  I do free 3-page line-edit samples for new clients. The same categories I will/won't work with applies as for edit letters (see above).

Booking & Payment


If you're ready to book (or want a sample critique), contact me and I'll get back to you asap. Payments are made via Paypal and reserve your spot on my schedule. If you book 4+ weeks in advance, I offer an option to pay a 1/2 deposit with the rest due the day I start the project. All my prices are based on EFA's recommended fee range.

Openings available for:

July, Aug, Oct

Cancellation Policy


If you need to cancel, please let me know asap so I can fill your spot! If you cancel up to 4 weeks before your read, there's no fee. If you cancel later than that, there's a potential cancellation fee of 20%, as it's difficult for me to fill empty slots on short notice. If I can find another client to take your spot, this fee won't be charged.

Naomi Edits  |  Naomi L. Hughes